I heard Ms. Ryan’s voice in my head: “You need help, kid”
As the kid in the back of the class don’t say anything when people bother him as he sitting in his chair they making fun of him because he is skinny everybody is bigger than him. He gets bully and has to give up his lunch money to the bully. The bully named was James and bigger than Jason, he took Jason money and pushed him around in the hallway for the 2 years. Jason told the teachers and his parents about him getting bully by James. Nobody did anything to stop it.
As Jason coming to his English class with his books in one hand and his lunch in other hand. James took his lunch and pushed him on the ground as he fell and Ms. Ryan ran to Jason and ask him,
“Are you ok?” Jason answered,
“Yea” Ms. Ryan said,
“What Happened to you” Ms. Ryan said with a concerned look on her face,
“Nothing” he shouts as he running away
Jason stayed in the bathroom till it was time to leave from school. He ran home he went straight to his room and slam the door and went to his bed and started to cry. Jason tried eating more than usual eat for but nothing happened to him.
His father came in the room when he noticed that he didn’t come in the kitchen to get his cookies and milk.
His father went in to room with a concerned look on his face as he asked,
“What happen in school today?” Jason smashed is headed in the pillow with anger the same as when he first went to the school.
Jason’s father called the school to see what happen and why he was crying and Ms. Ryan picked up the phone.
“I was wondered why my son Jason was crying?”
“He is getting bully and we should have a meeting but Jason is not going to talk about it”
I’m come to the school tomorrow for the meeting”
“Ok”
Jason walked to school early and tried to avoid the bully and his dad follows him to school to see who’s messing with his son. Jason hides beyond a car before James seemed him. The dad realized that he was getting by James. The father knows the James’s mother they is cousins but James and Jason doesn’t know that. He called his mother and setup a meeting to see why James and Jason are not getting along.
James and Jason were in the kitchen by their trying to talk. James was looking to find something to eat and Jason was scared to talk to him because he always takes his lunch money.
Jason asked James,
“Why you always pushing me and taking my lunch everyday?”
James replied,
“I don’t know I guess because you don’t do anything to defeat yourself when people pick on you”
James tried to take his grandmother sweater that she made for him before she died. Jason told James when he was trying to take the sweater,
“Don’t take my sweater, it’s mine”
Jason punched James in the face and James ran to his mother and said Jason hit him.
The next day Jason saw James and he said,
“I’m sorry for being a bully to you these years”
Jason was happy that he didn’t have any more problems with nobody else.
EJ we need to sit and talk about your short stories. When writing a story you need to be prepared to do several drafts. Your story needs to have a purpose and some sort of problem/conflict that changes the main character. Also your use of present and past tense needs to be worked on sometimes you are in present tense sometimes you are in past tense and it makes the story sound very confusing.
ReplyDelete"As Jason coming to his English class with his books in one hand and his lunch in other hand."
Where is the action in this sentence? A revised sentence would look like:
Jason walked to his English class with his books in one hand and his lunch in the other.